[discuss] Final draft of the IGF Mandate recommendation statement

[Niels ten Oever]

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Really great work, thanks a lot for drafting this in these busy days.

Some small suggestions:

1. replace: widespread multi-stakeholder support to broad
multi-stakeholder support
2. replace continuing with prolonged mandate for
3. in para two the it sounds a bit like the biggest
achievement/objective of the IGF is supporting the IGF trust fund
4. perhaps a bit more enchanting first sentence? Perhaps along the
lines of: The internet is here to stay, the same should be true for
the IGF because multistakeholder dialogue is essential for maintaining
this crucial tool for freedom of expression, social and economical
development.

I hope this helps.


Best,

Niels


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On 09/03/2014 11:46 PM, Marilyn Cade wrote:
> YUP. MUCH better 'english'. I also point out a spell check error in
> 3 bullet/use of 'an' rather than 'and'.It is a small item, but just
> pointing out. M
> 
>> Date: Wed, 3 Sep 2014 23:22:56 +0200 From: jeanette at wzb.eu To:
>> cdel at firsthand.net; stephanie.perrin at mail.utoronto.ca CC:
>> bestbits at lists.bestbits.net; discuss at 1net.org;
>> governance at lists.igcaucus.org Subject: Re: [discuss] Final draft
>> of the IGF Mandate recommendation	statement
>> 
>> Good point! Jeanette
>> 
>> Am 03.09.14 18:36, schrieb Christian de Larrinaga:
>>> Replace
>>> 
>>> In order to allow the IGF to reach its full potential as a
>>> forum for all stakeholders in Internet Governance, we the
>>> undersigned participants at the 2014 IGF in Istanbul recommend
>>> an extension of the its mandate which is open-ended, as soon as
>>> possible.   This letter will remain open for signature until
>>> November 1, 2014.
>>> 
>>> 
>>> to
>>> 
>>> In order to allow the IGF to reach its full potential as a
>>> forum for all stakeholders in Internet Governance, we the
>>> undersigned participants of the 2014 IGF recommend that its
>>> mandate is extended as soon as possible to be open-ended.
>>> 
>>> This letter will remain open for signature until November 1,
>>> 2014.
>>> 
>>> 
>>> 
>>> 
>>> Christian NB I'm not in Istanbul but hopefully still considered
>>> a participant.
>>> 
>>> Stephanie Perrin wrote:
>>>> Attached is the final draft of the statement re extension of
>>>> the IGF mandate.  We have engaged in many consultations and
>>>> are optimistic that many different stakeholders will sign on,
>>>> possibly including countries. Please return any comments to
>>>> me directly tonight, cc Jeanette Hofmann, and I will manage
>>>> their input prior to the opening of the document for
>>>> signature tomorrow morning.  We are looking for a suitable
>>>> platform to put the document up for signature, suggestions 
>>>> welcome. Thank you all for your help on this, it has been
>>>> great to work with everyone! Stephanie Perrin and Jeanette
>>>> Hofmann _______________________________________________ 
>>>> discuss mailing list discuss at 1net.org 
>>>> http://1net-mail.1net.org/mailman/listinfo/discuss
>>> 
>>> -- Christian de Larrinaga FBCS, CITP, MCMA 
>>> ------------------------- @ FirstHand 
>>> ------------------------- +44 7989 386778 cdel at firsthand.net 
>>> -------------------------
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